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 * **Original (what you wrote)** || **Revision (how it changed after feedback)** || **Explanation/Rule (catchy way to remember for next time)** ||
 * Sounded too research-papery (genre 1, newspaper article) || Made it more story-ish and added quotes/interviews || Newspaper articles have news stories and in stories people talk. ||
 * "There have been at least 150 residents from Salem and its surrounding area accused of witchcraft and 20 of those accused have been convicted and sentenced to death." (genre 1) || "There have been at least 150 residents from Salem and its surrounding area accused of witchcraft, and 20 of those accused have been convicted and sentenced to death." || Commas and conjunctions connect sentences. ||
 * "About half of them have only had about one or two people who were accused." (genre 1) || "Half of them have only had about one or two people who were accused." || Approximations sound less credible. ||
 * "As it is already..." (genre 1) || "As is already..." || IT is not necessary. ||
 * "well-known, well-reinforced" (genre 1) || "well known, well reinforced" || You don't need a hyphen when describing stuff with verbs. ||
 * "Around age 60" (genre 2, obituary) || "age 60" || Obituaries are exact with ages ||
 * "In April of 1692" (genre 2) || "In April" || You don't need the year included if it's written in that year. ||
 * "Where the amount of accusations" (genre 3, 30 seconds) || "Where the number of accusations" || Use numbers with nouns ||
 * "a crime of which I have taken no part in" (genre 3) || "a crime of which I have taken no part" || "Of which" makes you not need to INsert the IN. ||
 * "Well, if you like mass hysteria" (genre 4, editorial) || "If you like mass hysteria" || "Well" is not writing-appropriate ||
 * "How many were actually guilty." (genre 4) || "How many were actualy guilty?" || Questions need question marks? ||
 * "Even most, if not all..." (genre 4) || "Most, if not all..." || "Even" is not needed with "most" ||
 * "the witches that remain, which there most likely still are some hiding out" (genre 4) || "the witches that remain, who may still be hiding out" || Use "who" for people. ||
 * "Interview with Tituba" (genre 5, interview) || "Local Slave Speaks Up About Witchcraft" || Make titles display content ||
 * "and getting convicted, and knowing in my heart that I am innocent" (genre 5) || "and getting convicted, knowing in my heart that I am innocent" || Fragments are okay for frazzled people. ||
 * " "witch", (genre 5) || " "witch," " || Punctuation goes inside parenthesis ||
 * "believed that it was my fault, and beat me until I confessed." (genre 5) || "believed that it was my fault and beat me until I confessed" || You don't need commas for two verbs ||
 * "The first article includes" (professional genre, journal article) || "the first article, "The Long and Short of Salem Witchcraft: Chronology and Collective Violence in 1692" by Richard Latner, includes" || Make sure to indroduce the source ||
 * "I plan to use information based from..." (profesional genre) || "I plan to use information from..." || Make sure sentences make sense. ||
 * "I would like to argue that there was no actual supernatural activity at work in Salem." (professional genre) || "I would like to propose several psychological and sociological alternatives to the witchcraft explanation" || Don't tell your audience what they already know. ||